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Dark and Cold.
If she had to pick two fundemental traits to describe her very core, it would be those.

Darkness.

But not any facet of the night, no, the darkest of darks, the deepest blackness, not of the night, but the soul, for no place is as deep and abysmal as the human soul.
Nowhere you enter a darkness so wide, into seemingly endless angles and corners filled with all the dirt a life in the society holds.

Coldness.

But not like an unexpected breeze from the north, not the first cool winter morning that makes you shiver.
More like the icy cold that aches your skin, brings tears to your eyes and irrupts your whole body.
The zero point that renders further advance impossible, that first paralyzes and then executes.

Please feel free to correct any mistakes, bad grammar or unusual words, for I am not a native English speaker.
I used a translator for all the words I didn't knew in English ^^;
Thanks for reading!
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sevenofeleven Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2014
More like the icy cold that aches your skin, brings tears to your eyes and irrupts your whole body. 

irrupts?

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Cool description.
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Aenea-Jones Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
It means spreading through your body... I didn't knew a better word for it ^^;
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sevenofeleven Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2014
Erupt?
metastasize? Might be too doctory and objective.
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Aenea-Jones Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Errupt means bursting out, that's not the right meaning...
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sevenofeleven Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2014
www.wordwebonline.com/en/IRRUP…

Will readers understand it?

I once used abattoir in a story but I had to change it because a writer friend
said it was probably beyond regular readers.
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Aenea-Jones Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Probably not, but I will leave it that way until I find a way to better express what I want to say. In my native language it makes perfect sense ^^;
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Kalusonyatagami890 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
me right here
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himeko7 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014
Pretty good, I'd say! :) (Smile) 
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LaughingWaters Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
A professor once made me chuckled about stereotypical topics. ( which is prevalent and dominant here in Singapore )


"What is cold? It is the absence of heat...." and so, he went on to explain on respecting differences between people and beliefs.

His name, is Albert Einstein.
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CorSecAgent Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Since you're bi-lingual, you should consider posting your writings in your native language as well.
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